Mara's songs (RC)

Mara · 03-24-2005, 05:10 PM

-Star Of Mine-

Beautiful star of mine
Why won't you shine for me?
Oh little star of mine
Why don't you want to sing?

Lately I don't feel like singing either
Maybe I'm crazy but I miss him

Beautiful star of mine
I want this to be real
Oh little star of mine
How am I supposed to feel?

Lately feeling is too near to me
Maybe this isn't what I want it to be

Beautiful star of mine
I don't want to sleep
Oh little star of mine
Please don't weep for me

Lately I guess I'm just scared
Maybe he feels for me, too

Beautiful star of mine
I won't be afraid
Because, star of mine
I'm gonna be okay

Lately I don't feel like singing either
Maybe I'm crazy but I miss him

I think that's all of it. I copied that down from memory so it might not be right, but knock it out anyway.

-Mara

Mara · 03-24-2005, 05:16 PM

Seven Days

(verse 1)
I miss you already
I hope you're thinking of me
I'm still praying for you
And I will always be
So many days away
Don't forget me while you're gone
I'll try not to be afraid
'Cuz I know it won't be long

(chorus)
For seven days I have to live without you
But seven days is seven days too long
For seven days I'm not sure what I will do
So for seven days I will sing this song

(verse 2)
I'm scared of so many things
But mostly of losing you
But you have never hurt me
That's one thing you would never do

(chorus)

(bridge)
For seven days I will trust
That soon you will be home
For seven days I'll believe
You're thinking of me, I am not alone

(chorus 2x)

Yeah, this is a pretty simple cliched song, but it means a lot to me. Hack it apart anyway, please

-Mara

Mara · 04-02-2005, 02:23 PM

Thanks for merging this, whoever you are

Mara · 04-02-2005, 03:16 PM

Try Again

(verse 1)
Did it only look so beautiful
From my wrapped-up heart's point of view?
Was it another masquerade?
I don't believe I lied to you
Did I take your heart too far?
Do you want me to take mine back?
Should we wait 'til we know life
Could you excuse the things I lack

(chorus)
Someday could be anytime
But I know I can wait that long
I cannot conceal my fear
But I can try to be strong
Maybe we can't have right now
But my heart will not grow thin
Life is still unknown to us
But someday we'll try again

Swanky · 04-02-2005, 05:00 PM

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Originally Posted by Mara

Thanks for merging this, whoever you are

No problem...

Mattlock · 04-02-2005, 06:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mara

-Star Of Mine-

Beautiful star of mine
Why won't you shine for me?
Oh little star of mine
Why don't you want to sing?

This is alright. Could be better, but...

Quote:

Lately I don't feel like singing either
Maybe I'm crazy but I miss him

I like this bridge/pre-chorus/verse/thing a lot. It really adds to the first part, and makes it better in a sense.

Quote:

Beautiful star of mine
I want this to be real
Oh little star of mine
How am I supposed to feel?

Lately feeling is too near to me
Maybe this isn't what I want it to be

I like this better than the first verse.

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Beautiful star of mine
I don't want to sleep
Oh little star of mine
Please don't weep for me

Lately I guess I'm just scared
Maybe he feels for me, too

This was good until the last line, in bold. I think you should put a different line there.

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Beautiful star of mine
I won't be afraid
Because, star of mine
I'm gonna be okay

Lately I don't feel like singing either
Maybe I'm crazy but I miss him

I don't like this as much as the others. But overall, this is a very good song! I'd like to hear a recording of it sometime!

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I think that's all of it. I copied that down from memory so it might not be right, but knock it out anyway.

-Mara

Mara · 04-05-2005, 12:55 PM

Thanks, Matt! I'm glad you liked it! Eventually a friend and I are going to record a bunch of songs that we've written, so I'll get it done then. It depends on when her brother is in town again though, because he's good at playing guitar

**Jake the Snake** · 04-05-2005, 03:37 PM

I think they are beautiful mara. When you record it send me some stuff

Your gonna be famous someday.

Mara · 04-09-2005, 09:41 PM

Something's wrong with me
Or sanity is finally here
I need to hear your voice
I need to let my mind clear
Thoughts suffocating
Not giving me room to breathe
I am still waiting
But I'm not sure what to think

I just don't know what to sing anymore

(chorus)
I'm going up and down
Hoping this is still beautiful
I'll be around
Trying to find ourselves
Where have we gone
And where do we have to go?
I'm asking you
Somewhere in me I think I know

Mara · 04-11-2005, 05:15 PM

(verse 1)
Why do I feel so lonley
Why does it look so dark
Are you thinking of me
Why are we so far apart
You ask me how I feel
I really don't know
In those times when I find myself
This is where I go

(chorus)
I'll escape into my world that only I can understand
I will sink into the music and stay as long as I can
While my song is being sung I know I'm still alive
If you need me I'm not here but you can find me finding life

(verse 2)
This world can be so empty
I refuse to belong
But it's all still pulling me
I'm trying to be strong
So many loves have left me
How can it be okay
I admit I am so scared
But I'll try to be brave

(chorus)

(bridge)
This is me
I can't help feeling alone
No one else feels
No one else knows
I am n ot like you
Stop trying to relate to me
I can't talk 'cause at the moment
I'm singing myself free

(chorus)

Mara · 04-12-2005, 12:35 PM

Could someone please critique these?

**Jake the Snake** · 04-12-2005, 01:50 PM

I've never been good at critizing words and poems and songs because you are the only one that feels them like you do and i don't know how to take them in and say somethings wrong since everythings like it should be in your perspective

I just like to read them

Mara · 04-16-2005, 05:39 PM

(verse 1)
I thought we would be best friends
Did we turn to once upon a time?
I miss getting to talk to you
Just asking if you're doing fine
We made it through the gray walking
Together, did you just forget?
It still seems you've left me behind
Is there something I should regret?

(chorus)
And I can't help but feel that you can't see
The difference between new friends and leaving me
There's such a fine line, a fine line tracing us
And I think maybe you still don't know
I love you but where did you go?
There's such a fine line, a fine line that you crossed

(verse 2)
I've thought about it long and hard
You know, I'm not the only one
I miss you, we miss you, too
Are you coming back? Where have you gone?
This isn't what should have been
Can you justify what happened to you?
Are you just stuck in denial
Or did you really forget the truth?

(chorus)

(bridge)
Is it just that we're no longer the same?
Common ground got lost somewhere
Do you even remember my name?
It's been so long since we've had life to share
You crossed the fine line, you crossed the fine line

(chorus)

Mara · 04-17-2005, 06:02 PM

Sleepless nights and my forced tears
Combined to make one of my greatest fears
You have to live for you to die
So once I guess I was alive

Why did you decide that you were gonna do this to me?
Everyone leaves the room and I'm all alone
This emptiness is sinking itself into me
Carving me into small and afraid

Just tell me you love me
Give me proof when the evidence is gone
Please don't let go of me
But first promise you're still holding on

Wondering what's coming next
Another blow? I'm doing my best
Trip and fall, lose my grip
I can't afford another slip

Mara · 04-17-2005, 06:05 PM

Live or die
Crucify
Nevermind
I'll be fine

Sinner's plea
Rescue me
I can't see
Set me free

(chorus)
Nevermind what I didn't do
I want to be near to you
Could you rescue, rescue me?
I can't let go of what I did wrong
I'm crying to you thru this song
Could you rescue, rescue me?

I wanna live
Please forvige
What I did
I'm so wrong

Mercy is near
Are you here
Afraid of fear
I need to hear

(chorus)

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Yeah, so far this is really lame. I pretty much hate it by now