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11-21-2004, 08:45 PM
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| the ghost at your side  Joined: May 2002 Location: Fort Myers, Florida Posts: 1,773
 | Empty Words On A Blank Slate(RC) Ok First of all...the title is kind of oxymoronical to the song...I wrote it to come across that way... Second of all the rhyme doesn't sound as though its right but the rhythm allows for it to be the way its written...so yeah I know it sounds a bit off just reading it... Empty Words On A Blank Slate (V1)Withered with perfection Splendor through aggression I wish that I could see into and through your eyes just for a little while Deviate from certainty I found a home in absurdity I wish that I could walk across the bed of pins and needles you threw down (C)Inhibitions only halt the able The condition of these lovers is anything but stable Feed false pretenses intraveinously Thats the only way I can stomach them anyway... (V2)Writhing in your degradation Backing down from confrontation When everythings like battleship, and we trade blows till one of us blows up And sure as apalling as it may seem The statements were more than flattering Floating by on your river of apathetic appologies to see what more there is to say (B)This is our condition This is where we stand here so unsure Nothing is gained by retention Nothing goes away when anythings ignored...
__________________ i wanna live on the stage. i wanna play the guitar and i wanna get payed. Last edited by Opie; 11-25-2004 at 06:43 PM. |
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11-23-2004, 08:49 PM
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| the ghost at your side Joined: May 2002 Location: Fort Myers, Florida Posts: 1,773
| bump... RC PLZ!
__________________ i wanna live on the stage. i wanna play the guitar and i wanna get payed. |
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11-23-2004, 09:21 PM
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| Your car crash eyes...  Joined: Aug 2004 Location: Detroit... Posts: 10,579
| Good job. I like it a lot. 
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11-25-2004, 06:44 PM
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| the ghost at your side Joined: May 2002 Location: Fort Myers, Florida Posts: 1,773
| I changed it up just a bit...Have at it!
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