[FreakShiny]

Ok... here's my first contribution to the Lit forum!

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Purple mondays and translucent
-blue thursdays mottle the minds of
the inhabitants of Humbletown. The dogs
jump
run
feed in the grassy knolls
which are plenty in The Keeper’s messy
glovebox
(gloves are never kept in there)
Hungry masses flock
to the brilliant head of state
while his left hand knows not what his shoelaces taste like.
adVICE
DIScipline
mercenary tactics don’t work well
…
in Rome.

So eat, drink, and be merry for tomorrow
we… live? Only if the non-image of the visage
of the One to whom we pay homage grants
it… but who are we to know…
?

And with all of this,
ants . . . . . .
just keep marching along their path;
carrying food to their fatbloatedengorged queen
deep in their holes in the ground beef
- mad cow –
in Paris? I think so.

~Cory Swanson

[FreakShiny]

Just a note I will add to this...

As with most of my poetry, I don't tell people what it means because I want them to glean their own opinion and interpretation and not rely on mine.

Enjoy!

[FreakShiny]

Anyone have any thoughts, criticisms, potato chips?

[FreakShiny]

BUMP

[LyssaJane]

Whoa!! That is really cool. I really like it even though it is so hard to understand. Really good stuff, keep writing!!!!!

[FreakShiny]

Originally Posted by LyssaJane

Whoa!! That is really cool. I really like it even though it is so hard to understand. Really good stuff, keep writing!!!!!

Sweet! Someone finally responded to my poem! Thanks for the input!

[LyssaJane]

No problem. Now you have to go look at mine and tell me what you think It's called Pride.

[smhatahy]

ummmm, what does it mean?

[FreakShiny]

Originally Posted by Akshay626

ummmm, what does it mean?

As stated before...

Originally Posted by I

As with most of my poetry, I don't tell people what it means because I want them to glean their own opinion and interpretation and not rely on mine.

[smhatahy]

Originally Posted by J-Fan

As stated before...

but i dont like interperting poetry.. so now im all

[FreakShiny]

Originally Posted by Akshay626

but i dont like interperting poetry.. so now im all

It's good for you.

[smhatahy]

Originally Posted by J-Fan

It's good for you.

how bout a hint?