[hapa_angel]

umm, gee thanks for everyone's comments lately.....

I KNOW someone's bound to read this thread eventually so please at least post some sort of comment!

Thanx anyway....

[hapa_angel]

[sarcasm]Gee thanks for all the lovely RCs I've gotten lately.[/sarcasm]


Oh well, here's another poem anyway.

Lament

Loneliness
permeates my conciousness
as I shed tears,
mourning what never was.
You
used to fill my stray thoughts
as I sat here,
longing for what I'll never have.
Feelings
only served to confuse me further
as I paced my room,
daydreaming about what can never be.
Life
passed me by for so long
as I stood still,
waiting for what will never happen.

[SmileAndFollow]

Originally Posted by hapa_angel

[sarcasm]Gee thanks for all the lovely RCs I've gotten lately.[/sarcasm]


Oh well, here's another poem anyway.

Lament

Loneliness
permeates my conciousness
as I shed tears,
mourning what never was.
You
used to fill my stray thoughts
as I sat here,
longing for what I'll never have.
Feelings
only served to confuse me further
as I paced my room,
daydreaming about what can never be.
Life
passed me by for so long
as I stood still,
waiting for what will never happen.

This one is very good. Clean breaks even flow. I like.

[hapa_angel]

yay thanx!

[hapa_angel]

This is actually some of a song... well, I intend for it to be a song, anyway. It's just a verse and pre-chorus... i have no idea what else to add onto it yet.



Look into the mirror
Do you know who you see
Or is that face
Just a distant memory
Of all your pain
And all your regrets
And all the things
That you'd rather forget

Don't wanna look at me
Don't wanna look inside
Don't wanna let me in
Just wanna run and hide

[hapa_angel]

Floating, soaring
Catching my breath
Panting, gasping
'Til there's nothing left
Reeling, feeling
Everything there is
Believing, seeing
Complete and utter bliss
Dazed, amazed
That this happened to me
Dumbfounded, confounded
At what might come to be
Remembered, reminded
Of failures past
Intrigued, inspired
To make this one last

[bigpirate]

that last one was great... like the way you feel when you just kinda realize you are falling for someone... before reality sets in .

[hapa_angel]

Finally, another one!
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coming or going
the difference unknown
whether here or there
or far from home
one thing i want
i yearn, i crave
to experience
your loving gaze
and feel the safety
of your embrace
on starlit night
fingers interlaced
bright moonlight
for all to see
as you and i
just sit and be

[hapa_angel]

how long before I finally see
the me that I was meant to be
she hides in plain view beside my shadow
yet dives for cover when i search below
everyone says they love me as i am
and yet, i wonder how they can
when even i know that's a farce
so maybe this sounds a little harsh
but what more is there for me to say
when i'm not who i want to be today

[fudrudler]

I read this. Just thought I'd let you know someone did.

[hapa_angel]

thanx dustin.

[hapa_angel]

links to two more.

Ride Home
moon at two a.m.

[hapa_angel]

Out of dust, life.
Out of brokenness, humility.
Out of foolishness, wisdom.
Out of strife, strength.
Out of empty pockets, plenty.
Out of impossibility, likelihood.
Out of uncertainty, courage.
Out of myopia, foresight.
Out of temporal, everlasting.
Out of filth, purity.
Out of ordinary, Godly.

Out of nothing, everything.

[mattslope]

Originally Posted by hapa_angel

Out of dust, life.
Out of brokenness, humility.
Out of foolishness, wisdom.
Out of strife, strength.
Out of empty pockets, plenty.
Out of impossibility, likelihood.
Out of uncertainty, courage.
Out of myopia, foresight.
Out of temporal, everlasting.
Out of filth, purity.
Out of ordinary, Godly.

Out of nothing, everything.

I really connect with brokenness to humility.

I think that likelihood is too vague, though. perhaps success or victory would fit better.

[Micaela]

Hey Rach! I really like some of these...

And don't get too upset about no responses...I have a poetry thread, and I get almost no (RC)s...and only occasional comments.

But I still write a lot...haha... Anyways...keep it up...you are a good writer.