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Originally Posted by iluvusr05 okay so some of my crap i write is bad but i need help with a sentence and another line to add. for all u poets or wanna be poets can help if they like.
i welcome thee into my life
forever you will stay in sight
if you may have to "go" <----- i dunno what is good, that doesnt make sense
dream of me for "all the nights" <-- it made sense in my head at first now it
doesnt so so good?! i dunno!
What do u think i could replace or add or change or whatever! thanks!  |
Depends what you're trying to write...I assume this is love for another person?
tragic:
I welcome thee into my life
Forever you will stay in sight
And even if you're torn from me
Dream of me in the still of night
peaceful:
I welcome thee into my life
Forever you will stay in sight
And when the days take you away
Dream of me in the still of night
bitter:
I welcome thee into my life
Forever you will stay in sight
And if you spurn me in favor of flight
Burn and toss in dreams of me every night