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Old 09-10-2003, 08:10 PM   #1
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getting used to it
I'm so tired of you
tryign to make me
lose all my momentum

well not really tired
I'm still buzzing on repressed anger
I could stay up three more days

and yeah, I'm not the greatest
wordsmith you'll ever meet
and I'm not the nicest to those
who get on my badside
and I can't see the difference
between new and old cliche's
and
who
uses
eleven
one
word
lines
all
in
a
row?

I've got so much youth in me
and I don't know what to do with it
I can't promise to have
benevolent intentions with your daughter
why is it so wrong just to want
a little taste to keep inside myself
I'm a human just like you
just a brain in a body
with the same blind spot
and I don't care
if you think I am right
or if you think I am wrong
I will be nice to you
if you are nice to me
and I will kiss you
if you let me
I just want to be
what I was born to be
and I can't promise to have
benevolent intentions with anyone
I can't promise not to
lust or hate or be a glutton for punishment
I can't promise not to get on your nerves
and maybe this won't
win a bit of respect

but what comes around comes around
and what goes around goes around
and that's something we'll all just have to get used to

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Old 09-10-2003, 09:01 PM   #2
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wow! I like it...very fresh. But it seems like it covers more then one subject. very good.
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Old 09-10-2003, 10:48 PM   #3
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Holy cow, Jeff. That was one of the most remarkable poems I've read in a VERY long time. I don't claim to be a great critic or a great writer, but I know what I like.
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Old 09-10-2003, 10:50 PM   #4
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"Wordsmith" is an awsome word. I like this.
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Old 09-10-2003, 10:58 PM   #5
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Thumbs up. Although I'm not sure if you were trying to be funny or not. Either way, I like.
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Old 09-10-2003, 11:15 PM   #6
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All I have to say for now (and quite possibly ever) is...

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Old 09-11-2003, 12:14 AM   #7
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that was awesome.
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Old 09-11-2003, 01:07 PM   #8
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Wow, this poem created quite a stir here. I thought that maybe it was another one of Jeff's "everything here sucks now" threads, but I was wrong. Well done, Jefe.
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Old 09-11-2003, 01:26 PM   #9
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Quote:
I've got so much youth in me
and I don't know what to do with it
I can't promise to have
benevolent intentions with your daughter
why is it so wrong just to want
a little taste to keep inside myself
I'm a human just like you
just a brain in a body
with the same blind spot
and I don't care
if you think I am right
or if you think I am wrong
I will be nice to you
if you are nice to me
and I will kiss you
if you let me
These lines are aboslutely fantastic. I like the rest of the poem as well, but these lines are great. Nice, man!
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Old 09-15-2003, 09:09 PM   #10
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Nthanael
"Wordsmith" is an awsome word. I like this.
I love the irony in that.

Quote:
Originally Posted by meatfinger
I thought that maybe it was another one of Jeff's "everything here sucks now" threads, but I was wrong
You mean it's not?
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