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Unread 04-20-2009, 09:44 AM   #31
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Whoa, I like this one quite a lot. So simple, but it works really, really well.

Thanks. Haiku is so much harder than it seems. It's so easy to make them cheesy and/or obvious.

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Unread 04-20-2009, 01:26 PM   #32
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Senryu #1

wide-eyed little boy
unwrapping empty boxes
best gifts of his life
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Unread 04-22-2009, 06:43 AM   #33
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Krispy Kreme

slick sugar suicide
melts in the mouth
far greater than
the sum of its parts
violently washed down
ice cold glass
filled with bovine
mammary secretions
I think I need another
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Gulf Song

We wade out knee-deep into the Gulf. Warm water splashes our faded jeans and we feel so alive. The stingrays dance around our feet as God sings to us on the breeze. Fifty miles away, in a slum outside of New Orleans, children join in on the chorus as they kick balls in the street.
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I Don't Know

some things
like birthdays
and anniversaries
escape my mind
names that go
with the faces I see
two or three times a month
if only there were a key
to unlock and empty
that cavernous space
filled with facts
data that I strain to recall
if only there were a key
I would not have called
your Aunt Brenda
Sally
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untitled #4

laying on concrete
chlorine burning my eyes
my moment of bravado
now numbed by tears
sitting up stings
but not as much
as the laughter
from the little girl
in the bright pink swimsuit
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untitled #5

Tomato sauce stains her apron.
Flour cakes her calloused hands.
Sweat drips from her wrinkled brow.
Like a maddened artist, she throws herself
into the latest masterpiece.

The sweet smell of garlic and oregano creeps up the stairs and distracts me from my algebra. Tommy covers his head with the pillow and grimaces; he never has liked Mom's lasagna.
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Rain

pitter
patter

pitter
patter

cool
drops
soak
me
to
the
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Struggling
to fill the void.
It's 3 am
again
rhyme scheme be damned.
Count the syllables.
One. More. Time.
Tick
tick
tick
of the clock
drives me crazy.
This is the longest April
I have ever known.
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Writing The Perfect Love Song

I want to save the world with these words or (at the very least) win your hand. I spill my heart out over a I - IV - V - V chord progression and weep to myself. The playback is muddy and there's too much reverb on my voice. I shake my head and sigh...pop radio is already oozing crap and I fear that I am only clogging the plumbing.
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Writing The Perfect Love Song

I want to save the world with these words or (at the very least) win your hand. I spill my heart out over a I - IV - V - V chord progression and weep to myself. The playback is muddy and there's too much reverb on my voice. I shake my head and sigh...pop radio is already oozing crap and I fear that I am only clogging the plumbing.
Very very good.
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Fighting With Myself

My emotions overtake me like a horde of ravenous zombies. I have boarded up all entries but they find a way. Dirty fingers claw their way into mind and I can't take it anymore. The lamp shatters as it connects with the wall, still wet with blood...my blood. It looks like a deranged child's magic marker masterpiece. I wipe my mouth with the back of my hand and glance over at the shattered mirror dangling behind the couch. The devil stares back and do my best to push him away. Somewhere deep inside...you speak. Your voice leads me out of the darkness and I collapse in the floor...a shell of who I used to be.
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Free Falling

She gazed out over the Hudson River,
the end of her life
played out in front of CNN's cameras;
her split decision broadcast
simultaneously in forty-seven languages.
A world watched curiously
as she stood on the brink,
the odds makers had her going at 10:1.
She closed her eyes,
oblivious to the attention
she'd been craving all her life.
A lone hand reached out to her
as she lept into the blue.
EMTs and policemen wrapped her in blankets
as they told her how lucky she was.
She was saved from the plunge that day
but she's been falling ever since.
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309 Cunningham Street

stand in the void
a blip on the cosmic radar
straddle the dead zone
between here and now
fight circumstance
one eye on the prize
the other blinded
severed at the optic nerve
perhaps that's the source
of the never-ending headache
that jolts me awake
each and every dawn
then wrestles me to sleep
in the witching hour
thoughts and memories
clash inside, like Athena
awaiting Hephaestus' axe
perhaps they will
spring forth and ride
off into the horizon
as I lay down to die
I really like this one as well, and not only, as mentioned before, for your reference to Homer's Iliad. The thing that I really like about this poem is the movement: "jolts me awake...wrestles me to sleep"--I love the symmetry and and completeness this gives to your thought--also, there is "stand," "straddle," "between," "spring," and "lay down." I've been reading a lot of poetry lately that focuses on animated landscapes (i.e. flowers, birds, insects, trees, rivers)--not some generic author's lame attempt at it, but deft, brisk, nimble incisions--and I have to admit, I'm replete with envy. If if only my words could prance like that! You sir, do it admirably.
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I really like this one as well, and not only, as mentioned before, for your reference to Homer's Iliad. The thing that I really like about this poem is the movement: "jolts me awake...wrestles me to sleep"--I love the symmetry and and completeness this gives to your thought--also, there is "stand," "straddle," "between," "spring," and "lay down." I've been reading a lot of poetry lately that focuses on animated landscapes (i.e. flowers, birds, insects, trees, rivers)--not some generic author's lame attempt at it, but deft, brisk, nimble incisions--and I have to admit, I'm replete with envy. If if only my words could prance like that! You sir, do it admirably.
Thank you for your kind words.

I still struggle when writing poetry. For someone who enjoys playing with words...this style of writing gives me fits. I guess I get lucky sometimes and succeed.

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