[6strings21frets]

Those last two were also quite good. There could be a career in the music industry for you soon

[tmlfan123]

Originally Posted by 6Strings21Frets

Those last two were also quite good. There could be a career in the music industry for you soon

Ha.

I wish

[tmlfan123]

This one is terrible and I know it... but I'm thinking I might sell the words to Nickelback for their next single...

(Verse 1)
I'm tired today and out of sorts
Tired of TV and its extreme sports
It's making me wish
Wish I had a special friend

(Chorus)
Someone I could hold
Someone I could trust
Someone with a heart of gold
Someone I could love
Someone I could kiss
Someone all of the above

(Verse 2)
Wish I could rest easy
In the arms of the one I love
The maybe I could see
What the world is made of

(Chorus)
Someone I could hold
Someone I could trust
Someone with a heart of gold
Someone I could love
Someone I could kiss
Someone all of the above

(Bridge)
It's days like today that I need you
Days like today I need you to get me through

(Chorus)
Someone I could hold
Someone I could trust
Someone with a heart of gold
Someone I could love
Someone I could kiss
Someone all of the above

[tmlfan123]

This one is extremely personal but I figure if I can't share it with fellow Christians that I'll never even meet, who can I share it with? (sorry it's a little extreme, but I wanted to keep it as raw as possible)

(Verse 1)
Another killer hits the screen
I look with disgust at his face
Then head upstairs and jack off
Thinking about my friend's body

(Chorus 1)
Tell me what's the difference
He's behind bars, I'm free
But we bear a resemblance
Oh the uncanny resemblance

(Verse 2)
Another wife beater in the paper
I look with disgust at his face
Then slam my bedroom door
On the fingers of the ones I need

(Chorus 2)
Just because their crime is obvious
They pay for it with their lives
Just because mine isn't
I pretend it's not as bad

(Bridge)
Wake me up
I need to be broken
Let me know
It's not alright

What if my thoughts
Were front-page news
What if my heart
Darkened the TV screens

(Chorus 1)
Tell me what's the difference
He's behind bars, I'm free
But we bear a resemblance
Oh the uncanny resemblance

[6strings21frets]

Originally Posted by tmlfan123

Ha.

I wish

O rly?

Originally Posted by tmlfan123

This one is terrible and I know it... but I'm thinking I might sell the words to Nickelback for their next single...

If you're trying to say that Nickelback are bad:

1. They're not. They're a great band.
2. That's actually not a bad song.

It would only suck if Nickelback sang it.

Originally Posted by tmlfan123

This one is extremely personal but I figure if I can't share it with fellow Christians that I'll never even meet, who can I share it with? (sorry it's a little extreme, but I wanted to keep it as raw as possible)

That is pretty extreme but it is good. The words hit me pretty hard though.

[tmlfan123]

(Verse 1)
Breathe in, breathe out
Day in and day out
They're oblivious to his pain
He's on the edge
All he needs is a push
They're oblivious
Nothing could be wrong
Inside this perfect house

(Chorus 1)
Your home is just a bubble
And it's about to break
Open your eyes
Before your only son dies

(Verse 2)
Light shines on a knife
How could you be so blind
Throwing away a life
For your peace of mind

(Chorus 2)
Your home is just a bubble
And it's about to break
Open your eyes
Before your only son dies

(Bridge)
How do you not see the brokeness
When you live at the same address

(Chorus 3)
Your home is just a bubble
And it's about to break
Open your eyes
Before your only son dies
Try to respond
But it's over and done
You wake up but
He's entered oblivion

[tmlfan123]

(Verse 1)
Sit me down and
Talk to me here and now
Grab for a hand
Need to be loved somehow

(Verse 2)
Knock me down then
Brush away all my tears
Let me know when
Your clouded thoughts have cleared

(Pre-Chorus)
Watch the actions
Try to guess
Leaning one way
More or less

(Chorus)
Speaking with two mouths
Is so unbecoming
Chaos takes its bows
With every song you sing

(Verse 3)
You change your mind
More often than your clothes
So unrefined
You feed it so it grows

(Pre-Chorus)
Watch the actions
Try to guess
Leaning one way
More or less

(Chorus)
Speaking with two mouths
Is so unbecoming
Chaos takes its bows
With every song you sing

(Bridge)
Are you holding on
Or letting go? x2

(Chorus)
Speaking with two mouths
Is so unbecoming
Chaos takes its bows
With every song you sing

[tmlfan123]

(Verse 1)
Turn out the lights
Haul down the blinds
Enter the night
Arrogant minds

(Pre-Chorus 1)
How can you know better
Than the One who put you here
I showed you in red letters
Still see you blocking your ears

(Chorus)
How can I make it any clearer?
How can I take you any nearer?
How can you dare profess to love me
When your sin is everything I see

(Verse 2)
Windows breaking
Moon turns to blood
The panic taking
The second Flood

(Pre-Chorus 2)
How can you know better
Than the One who put you here
I showed you in red letters
This rain has become my tears

(Chorus)
How can I make it any clearer?
How can I take you any nearer?
How can you dare profess to love me
When your sin is everything I see

(Bridge)
You know I'm waiting
For this world gone wild
End all your hating
Come back home my child

(Chorus)
How can I make it any clearer?
How can I take you any nearer?
How can you dare profess to love me
When your sin is everything I see

[1 Into God]

Dude they're all so good. Some of them I'm struggling to get a melody in my mind so I'd love to hear them, but the lyrics are superb.

That extreme one is extreme, but it's so true.

[6strings21frets]

Keep writing! These are great!

[tmlfan123]

Well I finally added very rough mp3's for Tug of War, These Tearstained Pages, The Thing That Hurts The Most, Pink-Purple Ribbon, Uncanny Resemblance, and Oblivious to Oblivion. Major warning: I did these on a friend's mp3 player's microphone. Anytime I get loud/high, it crackles like popcorn. Also, I only got one shot to record each song, so they're complete with forgotten chords, forgotten words, forgotten melodies, and bad musicianship in general. Having said that, you'll at least get an idea for how the songs go.

[tmlfan123]

I guess they're all just terrible and no one wants to break it to me?

[6strings21frets]

Originally Posted by tmlfan123

I guess they're all just terrible and no one wants to break it to me?

Originally Posted by 6strings21frets

Keep writing! These are great!

I just haven't been able to listen to them yet. Our broadband is capped so I can't download/open many media files at the moment. I'll listen to them as soon as I can.

Keep up the good work!

[tmlfan123]

This is a duet... one of my friends said she'd sing a duet with me if I wrote one so I decided to try. It's probably not done, I'm not sold on how fast voice #1 changes his/her mind, but this is at least the idea.

(voice #1)
All I see is blackness
A vast expanse of sky
The day gave way to night
Tonight I wonder why

(voice #2)
All I see is starlight
It's filling up the sky
Spilling down towards me
Tonight I don't care why

Can you see the planets?
(v#1 - All I see are clouds)
They're calling to you
They're calling to me
Their colours pushing through

(voice #1)
Can't you see the darkness?
(v#2 - Not with moonlight on my face)
It's crowding around us
It threatens to drown us
How are you not afraid?

(voice #2)
Let me show you something
Look up at the heavens
There's darkness yes
But it's punctuated
By a thousand points of light

(voice #1)
Now I think I begin to see
Just how the sky was meant to be

(together)
Now together we sing of
Light in the darkness
Stars in the sky
Finding the moonbeams
Wherever we lie

Together we are
Singing to the stars

[tmlfan123]

C'mon guys... 16 views and no comments? I really want to get better at this but it's hard with no feedback