[timio]

This is for one of my classes... It's a letter to myself in 10 years to see what I'm doing... I hope that explains things...

Any comments/questions are welcome...

I think I've figured out what I want to do after I'm done at Lambton...

Tim

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January 30, 2002

January 30, 2012

1546 Everglades Drive
Goderich, Ontario
N9K 1T9



Dear Tim:

And so we meet again, Mr. Smith. It’s been a fun ten years, hasn’t it? You’ve come a long way from the young man you were in college. Who would have known that your skills learned in the HAT program would come in handy for your job as youth worker with your church? All the meeting planning information has come in very useful when planning retreats and conferences for your youth groups. This is where you want to be, sharing your life knowledge with young minds, who in turn cheer you up when you’re feeling low.

Last night, the kids surprised you and your wife with a surprise baby shower for your newborn girl, Melissa Katherine. You never know what you can expect from youth group on Tuesday nights. Two weeks before your wedding, they rented a karaoke machine and had a surprise bachelor party for you and your wife. And then they wrote you two a song for the wedding. Who would have known that they were so talented?

As for education, you’re taking a bachelor in Youth Ministry course via correspondence from the Moody Bible Institute in downtown Chicago. Remembering the deadlines in college, this is helping bring back memories of the olden days with papers due every week and long weekend hours working on your projects. All of this and working for the church full time as a youth worker, life is good. God is good.

You thank the Lord for the blessing’s he’s provided you with every day, and wait adamantly to see what’s coming up as you travel through life.

Enjoy your life, because it’s the only one you have. Protect yourself and your family from the dangers of the world. Dedicate yourself and your family to a Godly lifestyle, and do not give up on the youth groups, you’ll get through to them yet!

Sincerely


Yourself

[timio]

Is this proper business letter format? Any suggestions for grammar?

I'd like to know by tomorrow sometime (Sunday)

Thanks - Tim.

[gymnast_girl_27]

Hey Tim

"And so we meet again, Mr. Grace."
"And then they wrote you two a song for the wedding. "

I don't think you are supposed to start a sentence with the word "and".


"You thank the Lord for the blessing’s he’s"

I think you should take out the apostrophe from "blessings" and change "he's" to "He has"


"Remembering the deadlines in college, this is helping bring back memories of the olden days with papers due every week and long weekend hours working on your projects. "

I'm not sure what to tell you about the grammer on that sentence, but it seems kind of odd to me..


hope this helps a little, and good luck!!

[timio]

thanks... I'll have to edit it a bit... I think it's supposed to be written by me in 10 years, not written to me in ten years as well... I'll check though.

Tim

[passinthru]

Tim,

You format is fine for a business letter. There's a bunch of stuff that I'd change in regards to sentence structure...it doesn't sound like a business letter in tone at all. IT sounds more like an informal email...I don't know what the assignment parameters are if it's to be formal or informal. If it's supposed to be formal then all the contractions have to go. You would also want a more sophisticated sentence structure (more compound and compound-complex sentences instead of simple ones).

If it's an informal letter then you're fine. I don't know if grammar is being weighted as a large portion of your mark or not...if it is, don't start your sentences with conjunctions and try to combine your ideas into better paragraphs.

Katie

[timio]

I'll be checking over the requirements soon, and take in your suggestions when I revise it...
Thanks!

Tim

[timio]

January 30, 2002

January 30, 2012

Tim Grace
1546 Everglades Drive
Goderich, Ontario
N9K 1T9

RE: 10 year letter to myself

Dear Tim:

And so we meet again, Mr. Smith. It has been a fun ten years. You have come a long way from the young man you were in college. Who would have known that your skills learned in the HAT program would come into good use for your job as youth worker with your church? The information attained in the Meeting Planning course has come in very useful when planning retreats and conferences for your youth groups. This is where you want to be, sharing your life knowledge with young minds, which in turn cheer you up when you’re feeling low.

Last night, the kids at youth group surprised you and your wife with a surprise baby shower for your newborn girl, Melissa Katherine. You never know what you can expect from youth group on Tuesday nights. Two weeks before your wedding, they rented a karaoke machine and had a surprise bachelor party for you and your wife. They also wrote you a song for the wedding reception. Who would have known that they were so talented?

As for education, you’re taking a bachelor in Youth Ministry course via correspondence from the Moody Bible Institute in downtown Chicago. All of this and working for the church full time as a youth worker. Life is good. God is good.

You thank the Lord for the blessings that He has provided you with every day, and wait adamantly to see what He has planned for you throughout life.

Enjoy your life, because it’s the only one you have. Protect yourself and your family from the dangers of the world. Dedicate yourself and your family to a Godly lifestyle, and do not give up on the youth groups, you will get through to them yet!

Sincerely


Yourself

[gymnast_girl_27]

looks good

I would still say that

"And so we meet again, Mr. Grace. "

needs the "and" taken off... I don't think you are supposed to start a sentence with 'and'.