[Napoleon17]

Originally Posted by 1 Into God

I think there's a disconnect here. I know it's not easy, in the song I say that it isn't easy, but it still should be easy given that He is GOD, and not only that, He takes care of us. That's more than enough reason to try our best to be perfect, and for that reason it should be easy, but because we are sinners at heart, it isn't. The operative word is should. It's a case of "it's easier said than done."

It's kinda like a tongue twister (as a weird, random example.) If you speak the language, you should be able to easily say every word, right? Well, when you put some words together it becomes hard to say the phrase. So, we know God, we know who He is, and we know what He's done, so it should be easy to give Him our everything. But sin and selfish desire were added into the mix and that makes it hard.

Got it? I don't mean to seem superior, but this is a good debate and I dearly love a good debate.

I think he's saying it's impossible... and you said in the song that it's hard.

[relient nelson]

Originally Posted by McLuvinjesus

I think he's saying it's impossible... and you said in the song that it's hard.

Exactly. It is not theologically correct and I think in a way it takes away from God's holiness.

[1 Into God]

Well this will be a case where we'll have to agree to disagree. I think there are times in our lives (the most brief of moments) where we are capable of truly surrendering, but they never last long. I do not see in any way how that diminishes God's power - He created us as perfect so that's how He intended us to be. It's not like I'm saying we don't need God to be perfect.

Honestly though, I still don't see why you're taking issue with the song. In the song I say it isn't easy - that's that. I said it's "hard" outside of the song while we were discussing this, and I recognize that it's impossible to be perfect in and of ourselves, but with Jesus we are blameless in His sight.

[relient nelson]

Originally Posted by 1 Into God

Well this will be a case where we'll have to agree to disagree. I think there are times in our lives (the most brief of moments) where we are capable of truly surrendering, but they never last long. I do not see in any way how that diminishes God's power - He created us as perfect so that's how He intended us to be. It's not like I'm saying we don't need God to be perfect.

Honestly though, I still don't see why you're taking issue with the song. In the song I say it isn't easy - that's that. I said it's "hard" outside of the song while we were discussing this, and I recognize that it's impossible to be perfect in and of ourselves, but with Jesus we are blameless in His sight.

If there were moments where we truly surrendered, we'd never go back. If we gave God all of ourselves, we would meet with Him in a way that is so amazing we wouldn't even remember anything else. A way that is so powerful the Bible makes it clear that it is dangerous. This is just Biblically impossible.

I'm taking issue with the song because you asked for real critique. In the future I suggest you don't ask for (RC) unless you're willing to accept comments without arguing with everyone who does. Your opinion is just as important as everyone else's on here (more important, when it comes to your songs). Critique is nothing personal, don't as for it unless you can take it impersonally.

[1 Into God]

Originally Posted by relient nelson

If there were moments where we truly surrendered, we'd never go back. If we gave God all of ourselves, we would meet with Him in a way that is so amazing we wouldn't even remember anything else. A way that is so powerful the Bible makes it clear that it is dangerous. This is just Biblically impossible.

I'm taking issue with the song because you asked for real critique. In the future I suggest you don't ask for (RC) unless you're willing to accept comments without arguing with everyone who does. Your opinion is just as important as everyone else's on here (more important, when it comes to your songs). Critique is nothing personal, don't as for it unless you can take it impersonally.

I'm not taking issue with the critique of the song, I want to hear the to hear the critiques more than the praises, but you keep talking about something that isn't in the song. "It isn't easy" could mean whatever you want - impossible, hard, whatever. I said it's "hard" outside the context of the song, so I still don't really understand the critique because you're talking about something that isn't really there.

Anyway, two different thoughts about the theological aspect and we can leave it there. I'd appreciate your comments on future songs.

[relient nelson]

Originally Posted by 1 Into God

I'm not taking issue with the critique of the song, I want to hear the to hear the critiques more than the praises, but you keep talking about something that isn't in the song. "It isn't easy" could mean whatever you want - impossible, hard, whatever. I said it's "hard" outside the context of the song, so I still don't really understand the critique because you're talking about something that isn't really there.

Anyway, two different thoughts about the theological aspect and we can leave it there. I'd appreciate your comments on future songs.

It's not the "it isn't easy" part that I disagree with, but rather the "it should be easy" part.

[1 Into God]

Well, my newest song. The music for this one is giving me trouble because it somehow ended up in 6/8 time, and I've only written one other song in that meter. Don't know what to do with it haha. So yeah, don't ask to hear it unless you want an a cappella version.

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V1:
I sit at the table with you
I've got my shades on
Just to try to hide the truth
Of what's going on inside my head
But truth is, you're in my head

Chorus:
I'm going all in
With just a couple of 2's
I've got no chance to win
In fact, I'm hoping I'll lose
You see I'm sick of this game
It's gotten far too tough
So please, just call my bluff

V2:
The chips are down
There before me
Everything I am is riding on this hand
Yet ironically I don't mind
Losing everything this time

[Chorus]

Bridge:
Just call my bluff so I can go
It's been long enough that you should know
That it's amateur versus pro
And all this here's just for show
'Cause the stakes are too high for me to win

Whoa (Stylized to match the melody... yeah, it's pro)

[Chorus]

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Well that's it. Thoughts?

[6strings21frets]

Well it's obviously better than you think it is because I actually got a rhythm for it, which is rare. Nothing seems forced either, which is good.

[1 Into God]

Tetelestai

I had kinda moved away from worships songs for awhile because I think they're hard to write without getting really cliche... I'm afraid this one might be (let's face it, there's kinda a limited spectrum of things to sing about in church. Not necessarily a bad thing, just makes it hard to be original haha).

Tetelestai is the greek for "It is finished." In my opinion, those three words (in English, 1 in greek) comprise the greatest utterance this world has ever known. With those three words, we are set free. With those three words, victory is complete and death is no more. With those three words, we are forever more blameless in the sight of God. With those three words, God died as our one and only sacrifice to satisfy a debt that we owed HIM. I suppose you could argue that "I AM" is the most powerful, but the finality of the words "it is finished" encompasses "I AM" in my mind.

Anyway, that's the theological portion of this note haha. Now to the music. I'll post a vid sooner than later, I'm having a hard time figuring out how to cut down on background noise and it's bothering me >.

As always, critiques are appreciated.


Verse 1

I've always wondered
If the sun would have risen that day
If it had known
That soon all would fade to gray
That in a few hours
The world would look away
As the son of morning's light
Died in humble display


Chorus
It is finished
He has done it
Love has saved the day
It is finished
He has won us
Life has swallowed the grave


Verse 2
I've always wondered
If the world was slow to wake
And if the sky just shut its eye
And quaked
And who could blame them
If the creatures sat in wait
Sensing death and victory
So great


Pre-Chorus
Then came a cry
Tetelestai
It is done!


-Chorus-


Bridge

(Ok, here I envision three layers of vocals)

1. We thank you for the blood (repeat twice, then start the next layer and keep repeating)

2. Christ has died and
Christ is risen
Christ will come again
(Chorus from Charlie Hall's "Mystery")


3. My chorus again in the background


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" " outside.

I feel this is a pretty self explanatory song, but I'll go ahead and say a little something.

Too often we have favorite quotes or say we believe something (like the Bible), and we quote the living bajeebus out of it or write it in a scrap book or note of encouragement (or my personal favorite, facebook quotes section), but we never do anything else with it.The words stay trapped between those four little hash marks that supposedly denote some sort of significance to the sentence, but whatever importance the words have is never realized through our actions. As a result, the words die a messy death of ink and lead as they are endlessly and meaninglessly transcribed over and over again.

Do something about it.


Verse 1
How many times
Have I read the words standing
On the page in front of me
How many times
Have I thought to myself
"Oh what a life that I could lead
If only I kept one or two, maybe three
Of these things in mind"


Chorus
I wanna live my life outside the quotation marks
To make these words come alive in the story of my life
To be a doer not just a reader, or hearer, or see-er... whatever it is
I want to live
Outside the quotation marks


Verse 2
How many times
Have I heard someone say something
And said "Hey wait, that's pretty great"
How many times
Have I said I'd do one thing
And done something other than
What I wanted to do
Oh the words in my mind
They're so confined

-Chorus-


Bridge
Given time
Maybe I'll find the words played out in my life
Given time
I hope that I'll find the words played out in my life

Instrumental

-Chorus-


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Believe that you are sent to the corners of the earth for God? Do it. Even if your corner of the earth is the street corner a block from your house.

Believe the early bird gets the worm? Don't procrastinate. (or, drag your lazy butt out of bed at 8 in the morning to go to the gym [which SUCKS might I add haha])

Believe an eye for the eye makes the world goes blind? Believe we're to love others, treat others right, love the one you're with, love your life in all its highs and lows, and all those other cliches? LIVE it.

If a picture's worth a thousand words, and a picture is a mere still shot of an infinitesimal moment in time and space, think how many words your actions are worth. Think what your life is worth.

/sermon.


Critiques?