[livingalive626]

please tell me what you think....this is a song our band is working on....it's a alt/hard rock song with a few screams...(screams will be shown in caps)

(intro)

(verses palm muted)

I'm hiding here
Behind me tears
Praying that You
Will draw me near

I'm sinking deeper
In dispair
Can You hear me?
Do You care?

Chorus:
Hear me
Hear my cry
Heal me
I'm not alright
Take me
From this place tonight
I need to feel you (2x)

(intro)

I'm crying out
For You to hear me
I feel your presense
Somewhere above me

(tension building in singing)
Please break the wall
Of our great divide
Come and save me
Save my life

(chorus)

(intro)

Bridge: (palm muted, tension rising)
I need
To feel You
I need
To feel You
I have
To feel You
I have
To feel YOU!!!!

(chorus, with a sprinkling of screams)

(outro)



what do ya think?

[AudioAUnderdog]

It doesn't strike me as overly original, but then again, I should probably take my own advise and word things more creatively in my own songs before I tell other people to.