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Old 07-28-2007, 09:45 PM   #1
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Answer me (RC)
Verse 1
Please listen O Lord to my cry for help
Please listen to my honest prayer
Im falling to pieces deep down
And only with you do i dare

Pre-Chorus
To try and conquer whats inside me
To fight it cause alone theres no victory

chorus
So i pray to you O God
Because i know you will answer me
And i cry to you O God
i need your love save me

Verse 2
All i see is shadows around me
And i dont know where else to turn
I just wanna throw myself at your feet
And inside me let your fire burn

Pre-Chorus 2
i wanna shine in a world of pain
i wanna rise with your glorious name

Chorus
So i pray to you O God
Because i know you will answer me
And i cry to you O God
i need your love save me

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Old 07-28-2007, 10:23 PM   #2
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It's a nice song...but it's missing poetry, I feel. It sounds earnest, but it also sounds generic. There's better ways to say what you're saying.
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Old 07-29-2007, 09:14 PM   #3
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okay hmm so what should i change any suggestions or basically everything
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