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Old 02-17-2007, 11:54 PM   #1
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Tree trunks erupt along these unlit side streets,
cat's-eyes flare bright beneath the branches
that moments ago had neither height nor
breadth, I inhale a carcinogenic breath as I
see an uncarved corner of this city create
itself as I round a corner I have never rounded
before. And what is more: candles and bulbs
burn and buzz on windowsills, the night is still,
Parkland Dr. is newborn on a peaceful night,
so I stay by its cradle until I turn right, and
find myself back on the length of Anderson Mill.

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Old 02-20-2007, 12:29 AM   #2
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"Heighth" seems strange to me, largely because I can't tell if it's intentional or not. Other than that, this is a beautiful piece. I love the idea of the world being created in your eyes as you see it for the first time. Wonderful.
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Old 02-20-2007, 01:06 AM   #3
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Whoops, good catch on the typo.
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Old 02-20-2007, 01:23 AM   #4
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I'm glad it was a typo and not a stylistic choice.
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Old 02-20-2007, 10:45 AM   #5
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I didnt even catch that at all. Too caught up in the reading I guess...
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Old 02-21-2007, 10:46 AM   #6
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I'm not sure about the repetition of "round", but I liked it otherwise. "flare bright beneath the branches" and "burn and buzz" I loved.
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