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Old 07-02-2006, 07:44 PM   #1
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Brown Paper Bag
My brown paper bag has a mottled, carious lining, teeming with
Dusty canisters of forgotten dreams, marked
With faded colors that have lost their flip attitude;
Pale orange, shabby green, tired yellow, lackluster blue
Like time capsules they’ve mouldered at the bottom of this
Paper bag of dreams
This paper bag of me.

These leftover snapshots of sentiment haven’t been
Crystallized in the eternal blessings of Father Time
They sparkle with marred, imperfect, ancient light
A naïve yellow from the prenatal world
A shadowy silhouette, a simulacrum, hideous
Dynamic dogma.
I've endeavored to throw away the
Secret whispers to human desires, to
Seek the golden trumpet of the Divine:
What has been revealed as sacred,
What I hope is truth.

So the next time I reach
Into that paper bag of mine for a cumbersome
Virgin dream
My clumsy fingers will crack
Another flimsy, plastic cask and those
Noxious fumes will issue forth from
The cracked garish colors,
Hold me in a trance:


My childish innocence dispelled.

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Old 07-02-2006, 07:50 PM   #2
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Holy Crap. That isz really incredible. You've got a thing for this. Thats amazing. Nice choice on words.
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"For hate is strong, and mocks the song
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The wrong shall fail, the right prevail
With peace on earth, good will to men.”
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Old 07-02-2006, 08:07 PM   #3
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Holy Crap. That isz really incredible. You've got a thing for this. Thats amazing. Nice choice on words.
Geez that is good... I'd never be able to make that up... or whatever you did with that.. GOOD JOB Ok I admit that last comment with the clapping smiles is kinda lame... sorry...
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Thanks guys And personally, I love clapping smilies, and I fully condone their use. Even if it is a bit noobish. I thumb my nose at conformity!
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Old 07-08-2006, 09:18 PM   #5
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That was great. When I was reading it, it felt like a perfect piece to be read out loud. It just really rolls of your tongue, and it has a lot of power. Good job.
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Old 07-09-2006, 11:43 AM   #6
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Thank you I usually write how I'm speaking, so maybe thats' why it had that quality (although I don't usually use some of those words in ordinary conversation).

Edit: And thanks for the nomination
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Old 07-17-2006, 08:18 PM   #7
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jengoesup - perfect combination of what you're going through with subtle allusions. You're officially a coolgirl.

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