[Joseph352]

hey, I feel like this poem sucks, but I just felt like to put it on here. Any comment is great, negative or positive.

The waves crash around me
It is so hard to see
The sail is greatly torn
It is forever no more
What it used to be

The wind rages recklessly
The storm shows hell’s face to me
It is overbearing
It is overpowering
I push myself uselessly

The boat is tossing and turning
The waves continue churning
They break my security
Showing my hypocrisy
I feel my heart burning

My life flashes before my eyes
Revealing all my lies
I try to say are true
That I didn’t need you
Never knowing I’m killing my life

I cry out in all my pain
“God, come save me again”
I fall down to my knees
And above my screams
All I hear is the rain

I look across the water
As it pours down harder
I see a beacon light
Within my sight
Knowing it is my Father

hopefully I get more on here that are better. Chow

[Ordinary Sarah]

Nice. It reminds me, in a way, of Rime of the Ancient Mariner by Samuel Taylor Coleridge. Except super condensed. And a lot more hopeful.

Anyways, good job.

[sunsurfer]

that is AWESOME. I love it!!!

[Christopher16]

I thought it was great,It remindes even in the darkest times,God is with you and He can take you through anything