[bobthecockroach]

When galaxies spiral out of control
and worlds get whirled about,
When skies crash land
and land crashes into the ocean,
When mountains fall
and falls cease their flow,
When birds stop singing
and heros are unsung,
When leaves all fall
and friends all leave,
When hearts are weak
and weakness kills:
Coming home

[Becky]

that is really awesome!!! perhaps you could add clarity by giving us some idea of WHY this person should come home?

[bobthecockroach]

They are coming home. It is all these apocolyptic events that signal their coming home. When the world falls apart, it is just then that we see God at work. Sometimes it takes catastrophe to bring us home to Him. That's sort of what I'm trying to get at with this poem.

[Becky]

oooooh, ok, I had no idea it had anything to do with God kk.. do you think you could bring that out a bit more in the poem?

[Ordinary Sarah]

Wow, I really liked the parallel structure you used. I also like the simplicity This is totally awesome.