Clakers44p
05-06-2001, 02:22 PM
Hey all,
I'm in the midst of starting up a band and possibly taking it seriously, and am looking for any feedback or criticism those who read this would like to offer. I have shared a lot of lyrics with friends, and they all seem to think they're wonderful, but then again, they are friends, so their judgement might be clouded. I could never find the courage to tell on of my friends their songs all out stink. Anyway, here are the lyrics to a recent song. If someone likes it and posts back, I'd be happy to share more. Oh, any suggestions for a title for the following song would be awesome too!
In Him,
Bob
Chorus:
I see you staring that hole in my head
Even when I walk away
I feel you pounding that door in my chest
Even while I run away
Chance encounter, dirty back alley street
Alone, a rhythm, two more footsteps beat
Much detached from last year’s leftover leaves
Distinct from the wind yet shaking stone eves
Wait a minute, were you following me?
Rearview headlights’ flash in the midst of my screams
Mass confusion, more lights, screeching steel beams
Oh God, was this death, did you pay for me?
In Gray’s churchyard, crumple on my knees
Crumbled tombstones could have crumbled me
But I’m free from rain-worn elegies
Condemned, dark death stands nailed to the tree.
Thanks for taking those wounds to your head
Even while I walked away
Thanks for loving this man to your death
Even while I ran away
Thanks for staring that hole in my head
‘Til I couldn’t walk away
Thanks for pounding that door in my chest
‘Til I couldn’t run away
I'm in the midst of starting up a band and possibly taking it seriously, and am looking for any feedback or criticism those who read this would like to offer. I have shared a lot of lyrics with friends, and they all seem to think they're wonderful, but then again, they are friends, so their judgement might be clouded. I could never find the courage to tell on of my friends their songs all out stink. Anyway, here are the lyrics to a recent song. If someone likes it and posts back, I'd be happy to share more. Oh, any suggestions for a title for the following song would be awesome too!
In Him,
Bob
Chorus:
I see you staring that hole in my head
Even when I walk away
I feel you pounding that door in my chest
Even while I run away
Chance encounter, dirty back alley street
Alone, a rhythm, two more footsteps beat
Much detached from last year’s leftover leaves
Distinct from the wind yet shaking stone eves
Wait a minute, were you following me?
Rearview headlights’ flash in the midst of my screams
Mass confusion, more lights, screeching steel beams
Oh God, was this death, did you pay for me?
In Gray’s churchyard, crumple on my knees
Crumbled tombstones could have crumbled me
But I’m free from rain-worn elegies
Condemned, dark death stands nailed to the tree.
Thanks for taking those wounds to your head
Even while I walked away
Thanks for loving this man to your death
Even while I ran away
Thanks for staring that hole in my head
‘Til I couldn’t walk away
Thanks for pounding that door in my chest
‘Til I couldn’t run away